Tuesday, 23 October 2018

I am poem


I Am Poem Image result for horse
I am A  Wild horse
I Wonder what average expense is.
I Hear the vocalisation of further animals.
I see the sunset before me.
I want to be Free.
I am a unflinching horse.

I pretend I am brave.
I feel  the wind throughout my main.
I touch the tip of the grass with my hooves.
I worry no one will like me.
I cry because have no one to run with.
I am Not brave.

I understand I’m not brave.
I say I am safe.
I dream of friends.
I try to get friends.
I hope I am safe.
I am a Horse.

8 comments:

  1. hi kayla im nela i love your poem but i dont understand some of it
    i have 4 horses do you have any horses???

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  2. Hello. I'm Ella and I'm from Kaingaroa School, Kaitaia. I love tigers, surfing and I LOVE food. You know what else I love. Your poem. So descriptive. FEEDBACK: I think you could work on not repeating.

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  3. Hi i am Ari and I am commenting on your blog. I like this and I think that I don't get some of it. Next time, make it

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  5. hi im Charlie from Kaingaroa school in the Far North im also a year 5 and a boy.I like the amount of description and your vocab. You also compared your self to a horse which is nice. I dont know if you've learnt this yet but you could add a WALT and a reflection. :)

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  6. hi I'm Spencer i like how you used a pitcher maybe you can do something then repeating

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  7. Kia ora Kayla my name is Kauri im a year 6 and i go to Kaingaroa school.I like your info and the amount of work your done just a little info you could put in a walt for my info thank you bye.

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  8. Hey Kayla i am Lara Urlich and i am a student at kaingaroa schooll i really like your description about yourself set as a horse maybe next time you could add a Reflection or walt.
    you seem like an amazing person.

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