The 1st Page
Hi, my name is Lizzy I Have one older sister called Alexandra. I went to my grandmother's house without Alexandra because of something urgent. I wondered of all the reasons why grandma would need me but I knew that it would be for a good cause.
I finally got there, grandma was reading this book. Now I didn't find this quite urgent so I told grandma and she suddenly vanished!. Outstandingly I looked in the book and there were sparkles and glitter everywhere. I hope I didn’t make a mess on grandmothers floor. “Ahhh”. In a split second, even just one blink I was there. Where you ask?. I don’t even know. It all just looked well, white.
There was just a key. I wondered what it was used for because THERE’S NOTHING HERE!. I walked over towards a black line and then something happened. It was like it threw me backwards. There are more things now and I think there’s something walking towards me. It looks like a killing tree thing then suddenly AAH!. To be continued…
Whaea Robs Feedback:
An exciting fantasy filled with suspense that has me sitting on the edge of my seat wondering what is going to happen next.
Well done Kayla. I love the way you are using paragraphs. Great level three writing.
